Fantastic story!
Great first time work too, El Jefe! It's hard to get all the angles, lighting, focus etc., especially if you have to hand hold the camera, but apart from a couple of the early shots I didn't notice anything, I was focussed on the drama.
I love that Bad santa Movie, it's not all that well known, I guess because it looks at the darker side of Christmas, but it's got a happy ending and better than watching Elf twenty times!
I need to work on getting those speech bubbles going in my stories, they do move things along quicker.