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Offline guy23

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violent criminals
« on: August 27, 2010, 13:26:17 »
This is my first story :confetti: :woohoo: :confetti:, hope you like it :crossed: :munch: :crossed:

One fine day John was out riding his bike.


he came across some dodgy looking men.


they injured him and knocked him off his bike.



they started to run

but ran straight into the police.

they are now under arrest,

and finally in prison.


THE END :clap: :clap: :clap: :clap: :clap:   PS:sorry its a bit short.
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Offline Tiermann

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Re: violent criminals
« Reply #1 on: August 27, 2010, 13:31:14 »
It's a great story. How long doesn't matter so much as the thought you put into it.  :) Thanks for sharing it with us
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Re: violent criminals
« Reply #2 on: August 27, 2010, 14:33:55 »
Nice short and efficient, despite the violence!! Well done!!
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Offline Gis

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Re: violent criminals
« Reply #3 on: August 27, 2010, 15:12:28 »
I hope John is doing ok...

Great story!

Pictures could use a tad more light :-)
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Re: violent criminals
« Reply #4 on: August 27, 2010, 15:53:48 »
Good story, well told.  Look forward to more of them.   :clap: :clap: :clap: :clap:
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Re: violent criminals
« Reply #5 on: August 27, 2010, 21:39:38 »
Very cool story! Hope to read more!  :clap: :clap: :clap:



Baden  :wave:
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Re: violent criminals
« Reply #6 on: August 27, 2010, 23:13:45 »
Oh no!  What happened to John? 
You definitely need the hospital to continue to story!  Talk to your folks.   :lol:

Great photos!
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Re: violent criminals
« Reply #7 on: August 28, 2010, 05:36:35 »
Quote from: guy23 on August 27, 2010, 13:26:17
PS:sorry its a bit short.
I had this English instructor a couple terms ago who would give us a word count for our essays over a range of a couple hundred words- She explained it was for the sake of those who need a word count to know how long to make the essays. The rest of us could make the essays as long or as short as we thought we needed it to be.
It’s a cute story- Don’t worry about the word (or picture) count. 8-)
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Offline guy23

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Re: violent criminals
« Reply #8 on: August 28, 2010, 18:54:19 »
thanks every one, i am going to put more on. :yippee: :klickygrin:
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Offline skypurr

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Re: violent criminals
« Reply #9 on: August 29, 2010, 00:55:51 »
For a first story that was very good, :wow:
Looking forward to seeing more.
Well done   :clap:

Elaine  :)
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