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Creative => Story-Telling => Topic started by: Gustavo on May 16, 2008, 03:19:41

Title: "Sir Elmo returns home"
Post by: Gustavo on May 16, 2008, 03:19:41: In the year of our Lord eleven-something,
a valiant knight there leaves his homeland,
near the village of Zirn
and sails toward the Holy Land, together with his compatriots

(http://www.playmofriends.com/forum/album/albums/userpics/10422/0805--elmo00a.jpg)

(http://www.playmofriends.com/forum/album/albums/userpics/10422/0805--elmo01.jpg)

(http://www.playmofriends.com/forum/album/albums/userpics/10422/0805--elmo02.jpg)
Title: Re: "Sir Elmo returns home"
Post by: Gustavo on May 16, 2008, 03:30:44: The battle, however, is harsh
& sir Elmo thinks with himself that he had better be back home soon

Therefore, there it happens that he leaves the Holy Land
and makes his path back home

(http://www.playmofriends.com/forum/album/albums/userpics/10422/0805--elmo02b.jpg)

& Alas! : Here he is, back to Bavaria on a colourful May of a First Quarter ...

(http://www.playmofriends.com/forum/album/albums/userpics/10422/0805--elmo03.jpg)
Title: Re: "Sir Elmo returns home"
Post by: Gustavo on May 16, 2008, 03:59:23: Sir Elmo
& Somebody Else

"Here I am, back to Bavaria on a colourful May of a First Quarter!"

(http://www.playmofriends.com/forum/album/albums/userpics/10422/0805--elmo04.jpg)

But Lo!: It seems that sir Elmo isn't alone ...

(http://www.playmofriends.com/forum/album/albums/userpics/10422/0805--elmo05.jpg)

"Do I hear somethin'? ..."

(http://www.playmofriends.com/forum/album/albums/userpics/10422/0805--elmo06.jpg)

"Ha!"

(http://www.playmofriends.com/forum/album/albums/userpics/10422/0805--elmo07.jpg)

?

(http://www.playmofriends.com/forum/album/albums/userpics/10422/0805--elmo08.jpg)

"Nah!: It's gotta be my imaginati'n..."

(http://www.playmofriends.com/forum/album/albums/userpics/10422/0805--elmo09.jpg)

*ting!*

(http://www.playmofriends.com/forum/album/albums/userpics/10422/0805--elmo10.jpg)

*sheeeeng*, POK!
("Do I know this guy?")
(http://www.playmofriends.com/forum/album/albums/userpics/10422/0805--elmo11.jpg)

FLOP!
"OH (... It's ... ELMO!)"
(http://www.playmofriends.com/forum/album/albums/userpics/10422/0805--elmo12.jpg)

"Eh??"
ZOOONG!
(http://www.playmofriends.com/forum/album/albums/userpics/10422/0805--elmo13.jpg)

"What's this?!"

(http://www.playmofriends.com/forum/album/albums/userpics/10422/0805--elmo14.jpg)

"It's a BOW!"

(http://www.playmofriends.com/forum/album/albums/userpics/10422/0805--elmo15.jpg)

"What's going on here?? ..."

(http://www.playmofriends.com/forum/album/albums/userpics/10422/0805--elmo16.jpg)

"I've GOT'ta have missed somethin'!"

(http://www.playmofriends.com/forum/album/albums/userpics/10422/0805--elmo17.jpg)
Title: Re: "Sir Elmo returns home"
Post by: Gustavo on May 16, 2008, 04:03:11: & So Erm ... THIS was the first chapter
of sir Elmo's chronicle!

(http://www.playmofriends.com/forum/album/albums/userpics/10422/0805--elmo18.jpg)
Title: Re: "Sir Elmo returns home"
Post by: Richard on May 16, 2008, 04:04:31: Gus, it would appear that your Sir Elmo might be lost ... ;)

His trip to the Holy Land actually put him in the middle of the Norman Invasion (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Bayeux_Tapestry) ... :lol:

However, your story, so far, is quite entertaining ...

All the best,
Richard

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Title: Re: "Sir Elmo returns home"
Post by: Gustavo on May 16, 2008, 04:08:36: It was quite unthought ...
Very according to the general idea, though! ;D

Anyway ... I think I'm going to need a better camera.
It will take a while. Maybe more lights 8}

G.--
Title: Re: "Sir Elmo returns home"
Post by: Richard on May 16, 2008, 04:17:22: Quote from: Gustavo on May 16, 2008, 04:08:36
.
Very according to the general idea, though! ;D

It was definitely "according to the general idea" ... ;)

Since this is Playmobil fantasy, it only has to be fun and imaginative.

We are NEVER bound by history or facts, because we have the freedom to go where our visions and dreams take us ...

All the best,
Richard
Title: Re: "Sir Elmo returns home"
Post by: CountBogro on May 16, 2008, 04:41:18: I loved it!

Very nicely done and ever so original. I am impressed :love:

Bogro
Title: Re: "Sir Elmo returns home"
Post by: Gustavo on May 18, 2008, 23:52:33: Will you bear another one, very much alike? ... ::)

I have the pictures; It's a bit more about the archer! :yup:

G.
Title: Re: "Sir Elmo returns home"
Post by: Richard on May 19, 2008, 00:14:45: I can't speak for everyone else, but I'd like to see more ... :wave:
Title: Re: "Sir Elmo returns home"
Post by: playmofire on May 19, 2008, 03:02:04: I'd like to see more, too. :) A great story, and I like the way you make use of original material, the Bayeux tapestry and mediaeval paintings. And I like the "soundtrack", too. Plus, you have an excellent eye for composing a picture and using two figures to great effect.

BTW, where does the very colourful archer figure come from?
Title: Re: "Sir Elmo returns home"
Post by: Gustavo on May 19, 2008, 19:07:52: Quote from: playmofire on May 19, 2008, 03:02:04

BTW, where does the very colourful archer figure come from?

Hi, Playmofire!

It's Special #4672 :)
attached below

G.
Title: Re: "Sir Elmo returns home"
Post by: Timotheos on May 20, 2008, 00:30:46: Hi Gus

Your story is cute-sy in the way that makes a man groan but makes a woman giggle like a child.

Yet, I thought the camera shots and the positioning of the klickies were clever.

Your medieval illustrations are funny, because they are so obviously inappropriate to the setting. We'll pretend you did it on purpose and leave it at that.

As for the sequel, strengthening the hook might help you catch more fish. As it stands the relevance of Elmo exposing his identity is not absolutely persuasive.

Other than serving as an exposition on the playfulness of the new generation male, your otherwise well-executed story lacks an enticing narrative.
Title: Re: "Sir Elmo returns home"
Post by: Gustavo on May 20, 2008, 02:41:40: Once you liked it, I will then work in the very complex text sequence for the

"Introduction of Mr. Archer"

(http://www.playmofriends.com/forum/album/albums/userpics/10422/normal_fletcher00.jpg)

See you soon!
:klickygrin:

G. :)
Title: Re: "Sir Elmo returns home"
Post by: Sylvia on May 21, 2008, 07:42:22: Well done, Gus! :D

This just goes to show you don't need a lot of figures or props to make an entertaining story! :)

You have a very good eye for what makes an interesting shot, and the narration style and placement of the text gives your story a unique touch. 8-)
Title: Re: "Sir Elmo returns home"
Post by: Martin Milner on May 21, 2008, 09:02:30: Very nicely done Gus! More! More!

Shows what can be done with just a few Special figures (I know you must've had at least 3 to get the parts!). It reminds me of the stories I used to make up when I only had a few figures and no other stuff.
Title: Re: "Sir Elmo returns home"
Post by: Richard on May 21, 2008, 14:28:13: Hello, Sylvia and Martin ... :wave: ... :wave:

Quote from: Sylvia on May 21, 2008, 07:42:22

This just goes to show you don't need a lot of figures or props to make an entertaining story! :)

Quote from: Martin Milner on May 21, 2008, 09:02:30

Shows what can be done with just a few Special figures (I know you must've had at least 3 to get the parts!). It reminds me of the stories I used to make up when I only had a few figures and no other stuff.

Sometimes, some of us seem to have so many Klickys that it becomes quite difficult to make up meaningful stories.

I've attached a couple of photos from GW-PC to illustrate. How could anyone create a great story like the one Gus wrote with this many figures?

(Photos courtesy of Vincent, Playmofrance (http://www.playmofrance.net/) and GW-PC (http://gardenwargaming.playclicks.com/forum/index.php?topic=1114.0).)

All the best,
Richard

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Title: Re: "Sir Elmo returns home"
Post by: Gustavo on May 22, 2008, 08:22:54: Quote from: Richard on May 21, 2008, 14:28:13
(Photos courtesy of Vincent, GW-PC (http://gardenwargaming.playclicks.com/forum/index.php?topic=1114.0).)

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Oh God!!! ... master Tailor DIED, in the middle of the mob! :o :'(

;) ;D :wave:

G.

(http://img91.imageshack.us/img91/2734/batailledulm3ug0.jpg)
Title: Re: "Sir Elmo returns home"
Post by: Richard on May 22, 2008, 15:16:44: Quote from: Gustavo on May 22, 2008, 08:22:54

Oh God!!! ... master Tailor DIED, in the middle of the mob! :o :'(

That's sick, Gus ... But, funny ... :lol:
Title: Re: "Sir Elmo returns home"
Post by: playmofire on May 22, 2008, 15:55:01: But maybe with something like this it's the creation which is more improtant than the story.